Comments on: Hypercube

By: David Masters

David Masters — Sat, 27 Mar 2010 15:43:49 +0000

Beautiful, poignant and deeply sad. This was one of my favourites that you’ve written, Simon.

By: Cecilia Dominic

Cecilia Dominic — Thu, 25 Mar 2010 03:21:40 +0000

Makes one wonder how much has been lost in the violence. Your descriptions are utterly entrancing.

Cecilia

By: PJ Kaiser

PJ Kaiser — Tue, 23 Mar 2010 14:54:01 +0000

Others have said “speechless” … and really struggling to put into words how beautiful this piece is. Your descriptions bring a level of understanding that is so deep. As readers we have a sense of how the unmistakable impression that Miremba made on the narrator and how tragic the situation is. Superb writing.

By: danpowell

danpowell — Tue, 23 Mar 2010 08:24:43 +0000

So much about this is beautiful. The biscuit wrapper glasses. Raw clots of data. Her ability to see the world in such a way reminded me of something I read yesterday about the universe as a quantum computer. I get a real sense of Miremba staring into the stuff of the universe and seeing the ‘bits,’ the ‘raw data’ as you put it. So apt and so sad that her name means peace.

By: ganymeder

ganymeder — Mon, 22 Mar 2010 18:26:16 +0000

Making a terrible overwhelming tragedy personal by identifying with a little girl. Genius.

By: Christian Bell

Christian Bell — Mon, 22 Mar 2010 14:11:29 +0000

This story is quite rich. You work with the ideas and details you present here in a masterful way and produce a compelling story.

By: Virginia.Moffatt

Virginia.Moffatt — Sun, 21 Mar 2010 21:43:05 +0000

Beautiful story as always.Great the way you wove the westerner’s powerlessness in with the challenge of the child who couldn’t get away. The only thing I wasn’t quite sure about was in the last line. “gentle child genius” felt a little overstated,though I did like “or of the massacre” so very minor point.

By: Mark Kerstetter

Mark Kerstetter — Sun, 21 Mar 2010 21:39:40 +0000

I’m usually speechless after I read your work. It deserves to be read and reread, for its language, its content, its feeling.

By: Cascade Lily

Cascade Lily — Sun, 21 Mar 2010 09:48:46 +0000

Simon, you’re a superstar of Fridayflash We love your writing – are you feeling the lurve?

Fantastic story, fantastic writing, although one little, tiny part didn’t quite flow as beautifully as the rest. I found this part of a sentence a bit sticky: “…drifted past within a militant degree of…” I think it’s the ‘past and ‘within’ abutting each other that’s the problem – it just didn’t scan well for me. But that’s just my reading of it. I appear to be the only one!

Sumptuous stuff, as always. When are you going to write a novel?

By: ~Tim

~Tim — Sat, 20 Mar 2010 20:39:28 +0000

What an intriguing character in this little girl. Maybe you’ll tell more of her story?