Comments on: Cusp

By: Dana

Dana — Wed, 03 Mar 2010 04:06:47 +0000

Really interesting. And the last line was beautiful.

By: Mark Kerstetter

Mark Kerstetter — Wed, 03 Mar 2010 00:19:26 +0000

“Legislate for respect” – what a laugh! We see this in microcosm every day in the corporate world, where Orwellian language is passed down to the ranks and we’re supposed to swallow it like good troopers. It’s a wonder anyone can use language like a sharp instrument, as you have done brilliantly here, on the cusp. I love the last two lines too. As long as one can voluntarily give of himself, he will not be invalid. Bravo.

By: Estrella Azul

Estrella Azul — Mon, 01 Mar 2010 22:36:13 +0000

Definitely caught my attention from the very first line! Really great flash

By: John Wiswell

John Wiswell — Mon, 01 Mar 2010 21:20:03 +0000

Hard to add anything after David Masters’s succinct reply and Marc Nash’s reflection. So I’ll just up and confess that I liked your old-man’s revolution and would like to see stories from their effort, on or against their side. You could do a lot of philosophical plumbing with them.

By: Amy Taylor

Amy Taylor — Sun, 28 Feb 2010 17:11:57 +0000

Your use of language and the accomplished story-telling here is a wonder!

By: Lou

Lou — Sun, 28 Feb 2010 13:12:30 +0000

You’re certainly not fiddling. Instead you’re performing the critical job of an artist, to point to the truth regardless of how many are smart enough to look.

This is, as always with your work, complexity executed with amazing deftness.

“I flicked over to Reality News to hear an ageing actor read their statement aloud – you’ll have seen him dressed up like the renegade himself in the trademark chequered shirt, high-waist slacks, those sensible shoes.”

Reality news. Yep.

Thank you.

By: Jared Branch

Jared Branch — Sun, 28 Feb 2010 04:47:41 +0000

Love this, as always, though I haven’t commented in a while I still read you religiously As always your prose is something to be envied. I love how you finish this.

By: Jessica Rosen

Jessica Rosen — Sun, 28 Feb 2010 04:39:44 +0000

What a richly drawn and fascinating piece. The dull acceptance of yet another atrocity in the name of the Elders. The searching examination of the meaning behind it. Most of all, the lessons, subtly given, as reminders to everyone. “But this is what it means to love.” Simple, exquisite.

Take care,
Jess

By: Melissa

Melissa — Sun, 28 Feb 2010 01:30:21 +0000

You write the truth so well. There’s an award for you at my blog. http://windspirit-girl.livejournal.com/21170.html

By: Melissa

Melissa — Sat, 27 Feb 2010 15:31:47 +0000

Brilliant, beautiful writing. So much to think about here.

“To kill, even, one’s own ageing ego and push back the parameters and allow a younger soul entry on their own terms into this adventurous world? To move oneself, finally, out of the damned way? Yes, these are heresies for the Elders.

But this is what it means to love.”

These lines remind me of Simone Weil’s concept of attention, the ability to put one’s own desires, prejudices, and any other thoughts through which you’d see the other aside–let the other stand before one as he or she is. I’d like to see the youth do the same.